Help squeezing Award "Basis for Selection" into 150 chars

[siobhan]

I am trying to describe the basis for selection for an award I won at my company.
It seems that only 150 characters is allowed. This is kind of crippling :p

Here is what I would like to say:

For engineering contribution to PRODUCT_NAME. Granted quarterly to a small number of engineers that produce an "enormous, measurable value for the company" and was "a defining moment at COMPANY_NAME". The award is given to contributors that "played a central role in some major portion of the project achievement" to a degree that they went "outside the expected scope of their daily jobs, and it would be difficult to imagine anyone else achieving better results in the same roles."

Here is what I am settling on, which fits in the 150 character limit.

For producing an "enormous, measurable value for the company" such that it'd be hard to "imagine anyone else achieving better results".

Am I relaying the right information? Any help would be greatly appreciated!

[mbamission]

What an unusual inquiry for this board - and I'm glad you asked it!

I do think you're conveying the right information but I have a couple of comments.

First, be sure to find out if the 150 characters is with or without spaces. Youdon't want to be in the position of assuming one and being wrong, and then having to edit frantically at the last minute.

I think you can also cut "for the company" since that should be self-evident if the company gave you the award.

Try this:

For producing enormous measurable value that was a company "defining moment", such that it would be hard to "imagine anyone...achieving better results

(I did put "company" in here, but because otherwise the defining moment could have been personal). This is 150

[siobhan]

Cool - thanks for the feedback!