to the original poster:
i've noticed a couple of brand-new threads by you, on problems for which there are already existing threads
that already answer the question(s) that you're posing.please SEARCH THE FORUM for existing threads dealing with the problem that you're posting.
it should be really, really easy to find the threads for sentence correction problems, since you can use any string of consecutive words from the sentence as a search string -- just highlight a group of words from the sentence, put it in quotes, use it as a search term, and you should find the relevant thread(s) without much of an issue. (this is how i find threads to which i can refer posters such as you.)
for this problem, see the following:
post21473.html#p21473and
post35718.html#p35718if you have further questions after you've read those, please post them on THAT thread, not on this one. we'll delete additional questions that are posted on this thread.