Sequence of modifiers that modify the same noun

[shalini.mishra89]

Hi there ,

Is the following construction -

"X , son of Y , grandson of Z " - correct ?

[RonPurewal]

Context?

Source?

Thanks.

[shalini.mishra89]

In the modifiers chapter of Manhattan sentence correction book , it says -
"Avoid long sequences of modifiers that modify the same noun"

In this context , is the sentence posted above correct ?

There is no official source of the question .

Hope this helps .

[RonPurewal]

In the modifiers chapter of Manhattan sentence correction book , it says -
"Avoid long sequences of modifiers that modify the same noun"

In this context , is the sentence posted above correct ?

There is no official source of the question .

Hope this helps .

What do you think is wrong with it?